Assignment 4 · First draft
This link takes you to the first draft (post feedback) of assignment 4. The version from the tutor with corrections and notes is lengthy so it will be placed here but not with a full set of notes. Instead I will outline some of the changes below:
Submitted to tutor
Version with some feedback highlighted below
The feedback ranged from some structural changes needed to be made in the arguments to working on the citations. The conclusion needs adjusting in the sense that I included references without backing them up and thus introduced new material in the conclusion not appropriate. Later in there were some problems with the references to to some some of the protagonists used in to illustrate points, such as the Bechers and their work on the the water towers from their typology series and Riis and his work as social documentary photographer.